Re: Talking Points for Fedora Server 21

[Truong Anh Tuan]

----- Original Message -----
> From: "Stephen Gallagher" 
> To: [e-mail]
> Sent: Monday, December 8, 2014 9:26:19 PM
> Subject: Re: Talking Points for Fedora Server 21
> On Wed, 2014-11-26 at 23:04 +0700, Truong Anh. Tuan wrote:
> > I am writing a series of Talking Points for Ambassadors to talk about
> > Fedora Server 21 during upcoming events.
> >
> > Please check out the very first draft here:
> > https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Fedora_21_talking_points#Fedora_Server
> >
> > All ideas and comments are welcome.
>
> Sorry for the long turnaround on this, it's been a busy week.
>
> The content looks good to me, but I think we want to stick with present
> or past tense. Not "A new D-BUS service will be made available", but
> "Fedora Server offers a new D-BUS service", etc.

Thanks, I have just made some changes on this.
However, I am not a native English speaker so please feel free to double
check it out and make necessary changes.

Kind regards,
Tuan