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From: "Stephen Gallagher" sgallagh@redhat.com To: server@lists.fedoraproject.org Sent: Monday, December 8, 2014 9:26:19 PM Subject: Re: Talking Points for Fedora Server 21
On Wed, 2014-11-26 at 23:04 +0700, Truong Anh. Tuan wrote:
I am writing a series of Talking Points for Ambassadors to talk about Fedora Server 21 during upcoming events.
Please check out the very first draft here: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Fedora_21_talking_points#Fedora_Server
All ideas and comments are welcome.
Sorry for the long turnaround on this, it's been a busy week.
The content looks good to me, but I think we want to stick with present or past tense. Not "A new D-BUS service will be made available", but "Fedora Server offers a new D-BUS service", etc.
Thanks, I have just made some changes on this. However, I am not a native English speaker so please feel free to double check it out and make necessary changes.
Kind regards, Tuan