Hi Jeffrey!
thx for you help!
Am Montag, den 30.01.2006, 12:23 -0500 schrieb Jeffrey Tadlock:
Gerold Kassube wrote:
> Can please anybody review these words?! We have to fullfinish our login
> till next week!
[...]
> short description English:
>
> Develops together with Red Hat the Linux-Distribution Fedora Core and
> the LDAP-Server Fedora Directory Server plus packages a lot of software
> suitable for Fedora Core in the community project Fedora Extras.
The Fedora Core Linux distribution is developed together with Red Hat
along with the Fedora Directory LDAP Server and community developed
packages for Fedora Extras.
Well, I really liked the other parts of you mail but don't like this one
-- "Fedora Project" is the Project Name and needs a (short) explanation.
Starting with "The Fedora Core Linux distribution..." is not the best
way to do that IMHO... But maybe that's just my opinion here.
--
Thorsten Leemhuis <fedora(a)leemhuis.info>